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Monday, June 24, 2013

Writing Review: Portfolio Sophie's Choice


Magiquest: Alphabetical sentence pargagraph:

An absolutely super fun thing to do when you’re in Myrtle Beach is go to the interactive video game arena called, “Magiquest”. Broadway at the beach is where Magiquest is located and it is fun for the whole family! Can you think of an even better way to spend a vacation then at Magiquest? Dustin, who works at Magiquest helped us pick out our wands and our clans, I chose the Woodsy Clan ad Lily chose the Warrior clan. Everyone got to choose a wand, except for mom because she didn’t want one and dad because he wasn’t there. First we went in to the training center where we learned how to play the game. “Go to the center of the room and point your wand at the screen on the turret,” said our instructor.” “Hurry and choose your mission, once you’ve chosen your mission the wizard will tell you a riddle of the things you need to find in the arena and who you must bring them to after you’ve completed your task.” I chose the enchant rune first; each rock gave you different powers when it was time to slay the dragon at the end. Just then, the wizard came on and gave me the riddle that I needed to find many different colored gems around the arena. Kellan, the wizard told me that after I found all of these gems that I had to bring them to the pixie in the Tree house in the sky. Luckily for me, I found all of the gems in no time and got to visit the pixie who gave us the rune of enchantment. Mom and Lily and I worked together as a team on the next rune, the lightning rune. Not many other people were in the arena so it was fun because there weren’t any lines to wait in at all to talk to the creatures. One of the creatures was the gargoyle of the shadow clan who in exchange for 2,000 pieces of gold gave us the distraction rune. Princess Diana was another creature that we talked to, after we brought her all of the items she wanted, she gave us the portal rune. Queen Esmeralda however as not quite as nice, in the dungeon is where she realms tricking young magi’s into never getting the rune that she holds, I saw other guests go up to her and she looks mean. Runes are like rocks that hold useful spells that can be used when fighting the dragon at the end of the game. Since we didn’t get all of the runes on our first visit, we didn’t get to battle the dragon yet. That’s why Magiquest is a great business idea, you have to keep coming back and it remembers your wand so when you come back you can increase your level and get closer and closer to battling the dragon. Understandable, we had a time limit and Lily was very upset when we had to leave because we didn’t get to meet the Goblin King, or Queen Esmeralda, or the Dragon yet, but were hoping there’s a Magiquest in Singapore! Vacation is really nice in South Carolina. We’re just wondering why there can’t be a Magiquest closer to us. Xavier, who was the person that trained us said the closest one to us was in Boston and Pennsylvania. Yet, we go to Boston quite often so maybe we can play again, someday. Zebra, Oh and if you haven’t noticed this is an alphabetical paragraph, and that Zebra word at the beginning of this sentence, yeah don’t pay attention to that, it’s just there so I can have a sentence that starts with Z!

 

 

 

 

 

Pirates Voyage: 1 – 14 word per sentence.

Fun. Fun Voyage. With some Pirates. Broadway at the Beach. With a really big feast. A dinner show at Pirate’s Voyage. We were on the Sapphire Pirates team! In the first act we learned about Pirates. And if we are were worthy enough to be one. We saw absolutely great stunt work and gymnastics and diving. The Second act was the Pirate Olympics Crimson Pirates against Sapphire. Lily got to be in the show, she got to chase geese. At the end of the Pirate Olympics the Sapphire pirates won a medal. And the glow in the dark mermaid pirate AWESOME show was at its end!

 

Double Trouble:

“Edgebono Eutoosis!” Melissa says as she’s casting a spell. “Well, hello there.” Melissa says to her new made duplicate of herself. “Hello, back.” The clone says. Melissa was a nine year old wizard at the time and without permission, duplicated herself so she wouldn’t have to go to school. “You are my clone.” Melissa says, “You will go to school as Melissa Prescott, while I stay in Wizconsin all day.” “Wizconsin” was the name of the name of the secret wizard and fantasy creature world that wizards could get to by opening a portal with a special key. They call it Wizconsin so if a mortal hears it, they think they are talking about the U.S state, Wisconsin. However, young Melissa’s plan failed and her parents caught her and her clone and told Melissa to get rid of the clone, but instead Melissa sent the clone off on another mission. First, Melissa duplicated the rest of her family members and then said this to them, “Ok, clone of me… your name is going to be Reagan, clone of Kris, your name is going to be… hmmm, Garrett, clone of Mom, you’ll be known as Claire, and clone of Dad, you will be called Steven, you are the Johnson family and I will shrink you down, once I learned the shrinking spell and I will play with you as dolls so….” “Melissa… who are you talking to? Did you get rid of that clone like I said?” Melissa’s mom screamed from across the hall. “Yes, mom she’s gone, she’s vanished, she has completely disappeared.” Melissa said…lying. “Ok, cause I will be in to check in a minute.” Uh oh! Melissa thought to herself, she couldn’t shrink the clones because she didn’t know the spell yet…. Frustrated, she started waving her wand around, and when she turned around the clones were gone. She accidently transported the Johnsons to Florida erases their minds completely! “Oh, good…she’s gone.” Melissa mother said as she peeked into Melissa’s room. Melissa was upset that she lost her dolls, but she was also wondering how she made them disappear and where to.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Double trouble:

6 years later, Jacksonville, Florida:

Reagan and her family were transported to Jacksonville six years ago with not a clue what was going on. Steven found a job, and a house and the family found a way to make a living. Reagan’s 16th birthday was next week, her family was planning a huge party and a surprise, they were going to move to California! “Hi Dana, its Claire, just wanted to make sure Hannah could come to the party.” Reagan’s mom was very nervous and wanted to make sure that all of Reagan’s friends would be able to make it to the party. “Call me back, Thank you bye.” Claire was definitely an over worrier just like Melissa’s mom, I guess the duplicate picked up the same personality, except of course, that the duplicates, didn’t know they were duplicates! Melissa’s parents weren’t making a big deal out of Melissa’s birthday as Reagan’s parents were, they were just planning a small family gathering and that was not at all what Melissa wanted .Melissa had almost completely forgotten about the clone spell until her wizard teacher taught it to her, however, her wizard teacher left out a very important part about the spell, when the wizard that casted the spell turns 16, and the clone has not yet been destroyed, the clone starts copying all of the wizards actions!

 

 

Double Trouble:

On the eve of December 12, the night before Melissa and Reagan turned sixteen, there was a change in the wind, instead of blowing from the west, it blew from the east, even in California which was, how many miles away from Florida, it made the top headline on the news, Melissa’s mom suspected something suspicious. Claire didn’t really care about it as much; she was just making sure everything went as planned for Reagan’s 16th birthday party. On the next morning, both girls had many presents to open and hugs to receive, Melissa had a whole bunch of her family members there, and since Reagan and her family had no family members, they had many of their friends there. Reagan and all of her friends and her friends family went out to lunch before the big party later that day, Melissa and her mom worked on preparing food for their whole family, while her dad, and uncles, and grandfathers, worked on party decorations. Reagan’s party was at a ballroom and she was wearing a rose pink, knee-lengthed dress with a rhinestone embellishment on the front, and her blonde hair was curled and pulled back into a bun. Melissa’s party had a few of her friends there and it was in her living room, she was wearing black skinny jeans and a floral tank top, her hair blonde hair was as normal, straight down with a headband. Both girls had fun at their parties and that was good, until, all of Melissa’s friends left just a little bit before 8:00, and it was just all of her wizard family there. When the clock struck 8:00, both girls experienced a slight change and at 8:01, Melissa took at her wand and turned her chocolate cupcakes into a 6 foot tall, red-velvet cake with floral printed fondant and edible rhinestones. The strange thing was, Reagan did the same exact thing as Melissa, unintentionally, and all of Reagan’s 300 guests guessed saw her wave her finger around and watched the three foot cake turn in the 6 foot one, with completely different design than the first one, Claire found a way to make them all believe it was special effects, but Reagan was completely shocked and new something had gone wrong.

 

Disney narrative Paragraph:

If you ever wanted to visit the Walt Disney World Theme park, Hollywood Studios, I suggest going there with me. I could show you around the entire park with my eyes closed, and if you want I could tell you about it now. You do? Well then you start by going to the entrance on the right you will see 4 foot high mint green walls with silver frames, inside the frames our pictures of three of the attractions that are at Hollywood studios, Toy Story Mania, the American Idol Experience, and Star tours, on the left is the same but with different attractions, The Lights, Motors, Action show, Rockin’ Rollercoaster, and Fantasia. Then you walk up to the silver ticket machines and you are officially in the park.

After you go past Tatooine Traders, you’ll find yourself on the famous streets of America, if you look to your left, you’ll see the city backdrop of New York, and if you look straight ahead, you’ll see San Francisco. If you walk toward San Francisco on your left will be “Muppet Vision 3D” Which is a movie featuring and starring the Muppets! It is a great show and you even get to see some of your favorite Muppets up close, some even run through the audience! Directly to your right from the Muppet vision you will be at the Honey I shrunk the Kids Movie Set Playground Adventure. These are reproductions of actual props from the movie, “Honey I shrunk the kids” Over behind “Honey I shrunk the kids playground are mama Melrose’s Italian Restaurant and Pizza Planet. Now from Pizza Planet, If you look straight ahead, you will see a giant coke bottle and a big red bus shoved halfway through a building this is the studio backlot tour, this is a fun adventure where you get to see props from many famous movies including, “Pirates of the Caribbean” The Muppet Movie” and many more classic movies, and some volunteer guests get to act out scenes and create a movie their selves!

Disney Narrative paragraph:

Just behind the Sorcerers hat you will see another iconic building, and inside this building lies the classic “Great Movie Ride” This ride takes you into the movies and you even get to see a little live theater! This 25 minute tour ride is great on a hot day when you want to sit down and relax and well, watch some movies! If you travel to your left from here on to Mickey Ave you will see the Animation courtyard, this is a real animation studio with classes teaching you how to draw your favorite Disney characters, and even creating characters yourself! Next to the Animation courtyard is the Little Mermaid show which is another great show for the little ones! From here if you travel towards Pixar Place to your right will be “One Man’s dream” a movie about Walt Disney and his life as well as future plans for Disney World. After this is the Legend of Captain Jack Sparrow an interactive 4D Pirate show. Now we head on into Pixar Place, where many of your favorite Toy Story characters lurk! And to your right once again is Toy Story Mania, the Carnival like game and the 2nd most popular ride in all of Walt Disney world. Ring Toss with Buzz and Aliens, Root, Toot, and Shoot with Woody and Jessie, and try to get the best score in your vehicle!

 

 

When you exit from Toy Story Mania you can walk straight on to Sunset Boulevard, where you will get a view of the tallest building in Hollywood Studios, The Hollywood Tower Hotel, or better known as, “The Tower of Terror!” When you walk in to this ride you will see indications that this is definitely an old abandoned Hollywood hotel, but you will continue on where the bellboys will lead you on an elevator that will take you beyond the fifth this thrilling elevator ride it is definitely worth it because the drop sequences are different every time dimension, to the thirteenth floor, and into, the Twilight Zone! If you dare to take the plunge onto you ride it and it is definitely worth the chills and anticipation. When you exit tower of terror, if you look to your left you will see a big red and white electric guitar with an upside down car hanging off of its neck, this is another favorite to guest going to Hollywood Studios, Rockin’ Roller coaster starring Aerosmith. When you enter this thrilling ride it seems like a recording studio…that’s because it is! And when Aerosmith sees you, they give you VIP tickets and backstage passes to their show, but since it starts in a couple of minutes, their manager gives you a super stretch super fast limo. The launch goes from 0-60 and features a loop, a corkscrew and many thrilling drops. Now if you are looking for a great show…I suggest Fantasmic and soar the powers of imagination with Mickey! The park closes now so I hope you have enjoyed your time with me here at Hollywood Studios and cone back again soon J

 

 

 

 

Components Camp paragraph:

I have gone to USFS’s Components Camp twice and I can honestly say that it keeps getting more and more impressive, the staff is just so amazing and so are all the volunteers that help as team leaders. I went to a camp in Ohio in 2011, and I can say that both were absolutely fantastic. I really like that Coaches and Parents can have their own classes too. My favorite part about this year’s components camp was working with all the different instructors and watching all of their different techniques and finding a way to put that into my skating. I loved meeting all the skaters on my team and seeing what I could learn from then, as well as making good friends with all of them. I definitely want to go back to Components Camp in the future, and work with new instructors, and learn so much more!

 

Brookgreen  gardens and Low country trail paragraphs:

                Brook green Gardens is filled with absolutely beautiful statues, fascinating plants and flowers, magnificent animals, and much history. With so many different activities Brook green Gardens is the perfect way to spend your day. The statues are Grecian God inspired and are beautiful painted in Gold, Silver, and bronze. There are also sculptures and statues of animals like a heron, a seal, and all the other animals in the zoo at Brook green Gardens. There are also many beautiful gardens filled with vibrant colored flowers and magical trees. Brook green Gardens used to be a Slave Plantation, and what is called, “The Low-country Trail,” is actually the historical rice field that many slaves in the 19th century worked at. There are also many different ponds throughout the Gardens, and many beautiful fountains in the ponds. I thought the Brook Green gardens were absolutely beautiful and I would love to go there again someday.

The Low-Country Trail was a historical walk on a South Carolina Slave Plantation from the 19th century with beautiful statues and a platform overlooking a rice plantation. On the Rice Plantation I could see all of the harsh climates that these slaves were working through, very hot weather wet weather, and all of the natural wildlife like alligators, panthers, poisonous snakes, and more. One of the statues was of a slave woman; you could see that every single day of her life had a routine, housework. She would work in the kitchen, clean the house, cook, and make sure everything was perfect for her master, then she would do the same thing for her own family. The statue was of a slave woman, with a broom, and apron, and she looking to the sky, as if she was looking for a better life, she was looking for something better in the future, but she knew this could never happen. I saw how small all of the slave houses were, and I really understand why they wanted to get away from the South and risk the chance of getting caught, I guess they thought it would still be better than being a slave.

I read an American Black Folktale today, it was called, He Lion, Bruh Bear, and Bruh Rabbit. It was about He Lion thinking all of the time about himself and only himself, me, myself, and I, he always said, me, myself, and I, I could tell by reading this story that He Lion, was actually the plantation owner who only thought about himself. Bruh Bear and Bruh Rabbit were the lower class, the slaves, they were always doing what He Lion told them to do, even if it wasn’t right, One day they told He Lion that he was being selfish and then He Lion got really mad, and he separated Bruh Bear and Bruh Rabbit and sent them (sold them) to another Lion far away, and that was the end of the story.

 

We spent about 3 ½ hours at the museum and then took an absolutely gorgeous walk through Central park all the way to FAO Schwartz. That’s when we started our video star. Jasmine videoed Cecilia and I on the big piano at FAO Schwartz dancing to One Direction…Oh yeah! That was a lot of fun. After FAO Schwartz we walked to Rockefeller Center and saw the NBC studios. After that, we went to Time Square…. And went shopping! We went to a lot of souvenir shops by Broadway and in Times Square and it was amazing! We went to Forever 21, and the Disney store and it was super cool! We also videoed us on the red stairs and when we were dancing, a woman behind us started dancing too….It was hilarious! We walked to Bryant park and went skating after Times Square…. And boy did we show off! We had like 8 feet of ice to do freestyle on in the middle, and we made the best of it. We practiced our solos and our thriller number and at one point everyone else skating stopped and watched us when our music came on and we couldn’t help ourselves from dancing! It was SOO much fun and a great experience! Thank you mom, Dad, and Meg for making this possible!

 

Writing with Dialogue:

. In writing today I wrote a paragraph about two characters having a conversation, this is called the Dialogue of a story. So I wrote a scene from the story “My Normal life” between the main character and my character: When I entered into my house, I saw him, “Umm what are you doing here?” I asked. “I needed to talk to you… immediately” he said. We made our way to the back of the room. “So you know that farmers market by Mrs. Refsals house, right?” “ya” I said with a question. “Well the stall that sells brown eggs is run by this man named Jeremiah, who went to grade school with my mom.” Max said. I thought to myself…”And your point is?” but instead I said, “Go on.” “He is actually related to the president!” Max said quite excitedly. “Can you believe it?!” he said one more time since I delayed my answer. “No, no I can’t… who told you this?” I said because I did not believe this story one bit. “Mrs. Refsal!” he said as I watched his eyes go to disappointed. “She was just messing with me wasn’t she…?” he said in a depressed tone of voice. “ya think” I said with a smirk.

 

When I entered into my house, I saw him. “Umm what are you doing here?” I asked.

“I needed to talk to you… immediately” he said.

We made our way to the back of the room. “So you know that farmers market by Mrs. Refsals house, right?”

“ya” I said with a question.

“Well the stall that sells brown eggs is run by this man named Jeremiah, who went to grade school with my mom.” Max said.

 I thought to myself…”And your point is?” but instead I said, “Go on.”

“He is actually related to the president!” Max said quite excitedly. “Can you believe it?!” he said one more time since I delayed my answer.

 “No, no I can’t… who told you this?” I said because I did not believe this story one bit.

“Mrs. Refsal!” he said as I watched his eyes go to disappointed.

“She was just messing with me wasn’t she…?” he said in a depressed tone of voice.

“ya think” I said with a smirk.

 

Writing exercise: Writers use details in their settings that match the mood of what is happening in the story: First think about details that a writer might include in a story that was humorous or light-hearted. What might the weather be like? The sun was running, hopelessly from the clouds chasing it. Then, the clouds ran away from the big blue patch of sky growing larger and larger and making the clouds disappear into a perfect day.

 

e. What time of day might it be? The sun was to the right of the sky so it was probably around 3:00, then I looked at my watch to see if my estimate was correct, 2:58…Oh I love to be right!

f. Now, write some sensory details that might include a scary part or a part where something bad is going to happen to a character. What might the weather be like: In my mind, the trees were closing in creating a dark tunnel around me, and the sky was a dark red like the color of blood…however, this was not the real weather. But knowing that my blood might be part of my sky in a couple of minutes, it seemed so.

g. What time of day might it be? It was night, I knew this for sure because I was tired, but I also knew that I couldn’t rest now, the “thing” was coming, and it was coming soon.

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